Okay made some changes..... recognize this scene? It's straight out of my comic
- Now even longer....! ugh. I keep rushing stuff to get it done and not taking time for quality... merg! the job search is not going well, I'm stressed out!
OK you want critique, ill give it to you lol not really lol
there are only two things that i think should be altered.
before anything, the girl with the long hair lets call her Maggee, the boy Dartten and the other girl (hair in eyes "cool") Oliver. OK
First off= When Oliver is going over her theory of the "crab-Octopus-man-boy" Maggee only has one expression over the occasional eye blinks. If someone was giving some kind of theory that crazy i would have so many expressions on my face. (eyes are everything in animation, darttens eyes are amazing)
and second= just a little thing= When dartten grades the paper from Maggee you can see it in his hands but when Oliver is done explaining her theory, dartten stands up and the papers are lost. I don't know if they just went out of the picture but that's just me..
Please don't take this badly, you asked so i gave.
Over all its a great story, i love how Dartten jumps up and says that oliver's story is crazy and that he is a sea god lol very nice
thanks so much! I forgot about the paper in that shot!!!!! now I must fix it, and I do have time to fill in some animation on "Maggee" haha!
I love the names you gave them so funny
haha, thanks, I'm glad you like it, I've been getting a lot of positive response to it, more so than I was expecting, so I guess it's impressive enough to add to my reel... eh?
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there are only two things that i think should be altered.
before anything, the girl with the long hair lets call her Maggee, the boy Dartten and the other girl (hair in eyes "cool") Oliver. OK
First off= When Oliver is going over her theory of the "crab-Octopus-man-boy" Maggee only has one expression over the occasional eye blinks. If someone was giving some kind of theory that crazy i would have so many expressions on my face. (eyes are everything in animation, darttens eyes are amazing)
and second= just a little thing= When dartten grades the paper from Maggee you can see it in his hands but when Oliver is done explaining her theory, dartten stands up and the papers are lost. I don't know if they just went out of the picture but that's just me..
Please don't take this badly, you asked so i gave.
Over all its a great story, i love how Dartten jumps up and says that oliver's story is crazy and that he is a sea god lol very nice
good luck with your demo wheel
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I love the names you gave them
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